Make the essential information clear immediately

The opening lines should simply state:

• what the item is;
• its general condition;
• whether it works correctly or has relevant issues;
• which main items are included.

Do not begin with a long personal story, a sequence of adjectives or secondary information.

You can add context later if it is genuinely useful.

The first priority is to let the reader quickly decide whether the listing matches what they are looking for.